i like the twist of the story...

please correct my grammar...i'm still learning the language...i'm from a non-English speaking country...

the last sentence is supoosed to be ..."I even don't know what are those terms..."

wow, this story is so cute...i hope you will write the beginning story of the tale...

...i gave you a five...

...i still liked the other chapter 2 you wrote....

wow, wow and wow! this chapter is really great...

...see, you are really an effective writer because you were able to make heretowrite react...heheheheh...

...i like your idea...
..it was really indeed interesting and i like how you put it into words...well, the story is like putting the world at the tip of your pen...whew! it's really great...and i hope you'll gonna continue it...good luck with your work!...

...the story is quite common and maybe you could add some colorful twist on it so it would not be that i-know-what-will-happen-next story...good luck with your future writings...