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micgwynnn

Date Joined: Dec. 30, 2007
Last Login: Oct. 8, 2008

13 Comments by micgwynnn

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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Very dark...Who is the main character? It reminds me of a narrative opening to an old Vincent Price horror flick....Time to flash back to the past and begin the tale of how your character came to the moment where he/she decided to walk the dark and cold path..decided that he/she was damned and all those who stumble upon what appears to be a personal journal find themselves unwittingly marked...It's definitely disturbing which is a good draw to any reader. Keep going!


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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Thank you LynxIII....


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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Thanks. It'll be one of those feel-good stories before it's all over.


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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Yes, there will be a chapter 3! Don't you love the nice guy with the good job?


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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Thanks. It was around 2:30 a.m. when I had the urge to write so didn't get a chance to edit (too tired!). Yes, some of it is personal feelings and experience but the storyline is fictitious. Judy wouldn't be a good character if she didn't have real feelings. It's always been said to "write what you know", otherwise, it wouldn't be believable to the readers. Thanks again!


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2 micgwynnn 6 years, 5 months ago Context

I'm liking this! Love the accent...love the hook....where's the next chapter? I wouldn't let another write it...you have too much of a personal style for someone else to step in!


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2 micgwynnn 6 years, 6 months ago Context

Great passage! I like the visual information and the also the child's point of view. You get a sense of someone older trying to remember what they saw back then as a child, with the understanding of a child. Keep going!


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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 6 months ago Context

Please don't leave the room! I'm finding your comments very helpful! My sister, the English teacher, said it lacked "the big grab" at the beginning when all I wanted to do was lead the reader slowly by the hand! All of my tales are "in progress"! I'm hoping to finish them all soon.


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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 6 months ago Context

You know, I had the opportunity yesterday to meet author, Charles Sheilds (he wrote the only biography on Harper Lee-author of "To Kill a Mockingbird") and I received the most wonderful piece of advice that has helped me in situations when the story stalls or I don't know where the character will go next! He said "Introduce a new character!" I thought that was brilliant! So when I have time this weekend, I'll be type, type, typing away!!!


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1 micgwynnn 6 years, 6 months ago Context

Thanks guys...will work on that....most appreciated!


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