Discussion of "Launch" by mellsy

Okay, so I had to comment on my own material just so anyone else who reads this doesn't think I'm a complete moron. I realize there are several errors (spelling, grammatical, and even punctuation) in this, as well as the continuation of this chapter. I was editing this in Word, and then trying to copy and paste it into SM at the same time, and I see now that some of the paragrahs that made it in were the un-edited versions. Also, the formatting got all weird in the last paragraph of this first part of "Launch" for some reason, but the continued chapter is fine. ~Sigh~ I'm learning as I go, here. Heh.

Spelling, grammar, etc is not so bad as to be overly worried, mellsy. Your writing skills are obvious and there's not anyone on this website that doesn't make "fat finger" mistakes...lol.
I am particularly admiring of your abilities in building characters and moving them smoothly through the plot. Sheridan, Turner and Marisol are REAL people and, in writing, that's as good as it can get, I think! My only negative is that the teacher's sudden observance that she'd mistakenly aligned the desks seemed a bit contrived. Otherwise, excellent piece.