Hey, great job! It kind of gave me chills when the darkness was talking! Very descriptive of the two beings. Minus a few grammatical errors, I think this was VERY well written! I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Thanks, imadj. I like the comments/critiques. Only taken in the good way, I promise. That's what these comments are here for, right? I'm thinking that Howard has seen Jane more recently. However, I wanted to show the readers the first time they've met. Didn't want him to just jump into the most recent encounter! I was also kind of thinking that when Jane comes in for her hynosis appt with Dr. Allister, she might remember the most recent encounter, and see Howard. Not from her childhood. Just a thought we could toy with?
Also, as a woman, I figured Jane would be upset and the break would help her to regain her emotions. I imagine it would be startling to her to have a stranger describe her house to a T.
Thank, I always enjoy a good critique!!
I can't really get a good handle on the aliens yet. Their intentions, etc.

Thanks! I was thinking (with the forums) that she's being thinking about it a lot, so she started doing research (via the internet) before seeing the shrink.

Thanks, I was trying to do just THAT!! :)

Good detail, when explaining the light! Definitely gave me a nice visual! I also like how you left it WIDE open! He recognizes her, but how? Made me jump on writing the next chapter!
I also liked how you had her have a lot of replies, but only three that relate to her. Maybe though she shouldn't have received them so quickly... Or even descreetly in her email vs. on the forum. Still good though, them mentioning the same light she remembers.
Keep up the great work!

Thanks! Maybe I (or the next person) will look into getting more details. Maybe during the appointment Jane has with Kelly and the board?

Thanks. The boss can either be used as a character, in case Jane goes back to work. Or I was pretty much using her as you say, to reveal the mental angle and to show how this has effected Jane's life.
Hey, do you know what the numbers next to each comment mean? I can adjust the numbers up or down, but doesn't seem to do anything else. I'm new to the site, so I don't know everything this site has to offer.

Hey, thanks... I have a few ways to go with this one... Though the laptop wasn't originally supposed to be important, but now I wonder if I should.
And I'm glad that you caught up on him not being quite right. I was not sure if that wouldn't be picked up on unless I wrote an additional chapter. :)

Wow! Explosive intro! I can't wait to read chapter two, but I wanted to comment first. I really felt like I was there, watching her react like that; seeing her memory! Very descriptive.
The only thing I would change is don't start with the "..." Just start with "Now I want you to go back". Grammer type stuff!

Great continuation. I'm extremely curious to see where you go with the ATM withdrawl and what the gruff man's message is!
And I love how you show what is happening from both Donald's view point and the gruff man's, and then you have them come together.