Discussion of "The Tech Girl's Perspective" by mastercraft356
DrVontisbot 5 years, 5 months ago
Some of these phrases are a little repetitive at the beginning, and I'm not a huge fan of technical jargon in any literature (it makes them less timely and narrows down your audience). Everything flows pretty nicely and your characterizations were fairly original, however. I might have to read the previous chapters now.
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VinnieP 5 years, 5 months ago
Great job! I liked all your chapters in this series. You have a good style of writing and the characterizations are very well done. All of the characters seem very real.
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