I would just like to apologize for the incorrect use of 'where' where 'wear' should be. Enjoy

You got it. I'll get on it and you will let me know what you think okay.

amen

Hudson1 that is what I like hearing. I have been sitting on this story for some time now and just decided to start posting it. What is it that you feel most creates the suspense and where would you take the story?

the question is 'why are they trying to avoid her?' Do you find the characters believable enough?

that is what I like to hear. Tell me,did you read them all back to back? What do you like best and least about the story.

glad you like it solo5. What do you like best and least about it?

Very nice WWB. You know I love first person narrative myself and this was great. I also love, love, love the twist ending that makes me have to reread just to make sure I got it right the first time.

very creepy. I like the first person narrative style. I have to say I thought our character was a man, despite the title, but the idea of a woman being in this predicament creates a different perspective.

I agree that the choppy sentences were a little distracting as I had to reread them a couple of times just to get the flow. I thought the descriptiveness of piece was good and the style of the writing seemed to play well with seemingly rural feel of the piece. A lot of questions about the identity of the character. This is great for next chapter writers. Personally, I pictured the unkempt person as an older grandmother type myself. Like the old lady on the block with all the cats. i.e. reclusive Bette Davis in Hush Hush Sweet Charlotte