Discussion of "New York" by marcusferdinand

I really enjoyed this. Your way with words describing New York through all of the senses kept me reading this all the way through. And I didn't see the ending coming. Pretty good stuff.
If I were more imaginative, I would be able to see a way to keep this going. I think it works perfectly as it is.

a bit overly descriptive. loose translation, a tad wordy. it reeks of someone whose taken too many writing courses and trying desperately to sound impressive. loosen the reins. just write...