Discussion of "New York" by marcusferdinand
Cheggs 5 years, 4 months ago
I really enjoyed this. Your way with words describing New York through all of the senses kept me reading this all the way through. And I didn't see the ending coming. Pretty good stuff.
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castorpollux 5 years, 3 months ago
a bit overly descriptive. loose translation, a tad wordy. it reeks of someone whose taken too many writing courses and trying desperately to sound impressive. loosen the reins. just write...
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