Discussion of "The Closet" by mandycrum

I just wanted to say thanks for such a great first chapter, I found it very inspiring and I hope you forgive me for impulsively murdering one of your characters... I couldn't help myself...

That's quite alright, dear...take it wherever you want! That's the beauty of SM.
Thank you for your kind words.

It's a bit short. I would have liked to read more. I like the quick insight into the main character with the closet door fear. That was nicely done.

I applaud you using the 1st person pov for this chapter. Most writers here avaoid that. They'd rather tell a story than write one.

I do not feel drawn to the character. I do not feel intensity in her dream. I do not fell her thirst or her pain.

I am curious as to what may have happened in the car accident, but beyond that, this doesn;t evoke much from me. 1.5