Discussion of "Feasting From Afar: The Beginning" by mandycrum

It took me a few minutes to clarify for myself why this was a mash rather than a new story...lol. I got it.
Excellent writing and you certainly took this storyline through a big curve!! I loved the last two lines!

Hi mandycrum-
Well you have crafted quite a magnificent chapter here. I couldn’t stop reading and I was SO annoyed when it ended. Because I totally wanted more!
Like the person who commented before, I wasn’t sure this should have been a continuation rather than a new story. I understand where you are going; I just think it is so freaking good it could have been a first chapter for something much larger than the October Chill series.
You created a realistic scene for me and I thought your dialogue was terrific. You managed to make me see both characters in such a short time. Nice work!
I was mildly distracted by the situation. This is a military unit, (American?), in London apparently after a war where many bombs are dropped. This is a past war because you call it the beginning, right? And there are some sort of humanoid creatures lurking around and eating humans? Awesome!
Of course it’s only one chapter so I wouldn’t expect all of these to be answered yet.
I voted a five and would have easily given more.

Side note: I was further entertained that the AD that got linked to this story said: Remove Cat Urine Smells. Haha

Remove cat urine smells, huh? Nice. ;)
I have a secret...this is actually a short story I wrote a while back, just modified a bit for the site. I know, I know, it takes away from the fun of writing continuing chapters, but I was curious as to what someone else would do with it. I never write science fiction-y stuff and I know NOTHING about war, so it was an odd piece for me to write. But if you are curious, I can send you the whole story so you can read my ending....

Would love to see it!
I would even suggest that you consider posting it as a beginning chapter, using your original storyline. I fear it may have gotten overlooked here in this October Chill Mash.
Have you ever considered publishing anything?
If so, keep your eyes open for up-coming StoryMash blogs. There are going to be some great opportunities in the coming weeks!

I've sent this story in to a few different sci-fi mags (physical and online versions) and nobody seems to like it. Oh well...
I'll go ahead and post this as the full story under a beginning chapter, let me know what you think of it! And thanks for the kudos. My ego needed it. ;)

Okay, it's posted under "Andy Williams and the Boys of Company B", parts one and two. It was too long to post as one part.
Enjoy!