very good. I enjoyed it. At least, it was far better than what happens in Wizard's First Rule by Terry Goodkind when one of the character gets nearly broken, lol.

Very good jackofalltrades. You definitely have your only little world, effectively constructed with interesting characters. Johnsa is a nice addition. Hosus and Pral are my favorite characters and that is a good thing since they are the main characters.

Can I ask for permission to write a parody of this? I usually like to parody things. You can thank Weird Al for being my influence! But yeah, I would just start with a different branch, a parallel universe sort of thing or you may call it BIZARRO WORLD.

If you don't respond, I'll assume it's a "yes" lol.

Very good job, Lady V. The tone of this piece was very engaging.

I didn't seem to get the impression that Joanna knew Wade enough so that he would even gather the courage to ask for her hand in marriage. That shows guts! To discuss this with her father even shows more courage.

So I'm guessing that there should be some sort of conflict arising from the unknown. Keep working on this because I shall read it.

Your piece has been continued :P

-Lord Alabaster

oooh that old hag sure gets to me! I hope she gets what she deserves in the end!

Actually, my first comment was meant for this piece. Don't know how it got to the other one, lol.

Comments on Ether (introduction).

I like the information concerning the Ethereal and this introduction can be used as a theme for the whole story which to me seems to do more with uncovering the truth behind the father's death and its connection to the Ethereal.

Good start. Quite ambitious to write about a world that is waaaaay ahead of our time. It was engaging and I will read the next chapter.

Good emotional hook.

Too brief at the moment. Continue on.

Myself's name is Ariel. I like to read a lot. I like fantasy, science fiction, mysteries, and "mainstream".

My favorite book so far is "The Count of Monte Cristo" by Alexander Dumas.