Discussion of "Daddy's Girl" by ladyvike15

This girl needs to survive another fatal car accident with a parent at the wheel. The writing is flawless. No need to keep as a draft. The anger is well-expressed. I look forward to the next chapter and feel the tension build towards...

This is great. I like how the story flows without stopping. It will make a good story. let us have the second part.

Impressive, LadyV, You are tackling a subject that some shy away from. I hope you'll continue it.

im trying to figure out where i wanna go from here...i have a few ideas i just need to get them all sorted out...i promise there'll be more for sure though!

Wow! I haven't read your stuff for awhile and damn, I've been missing out...lol.

Great job here, lady V. I like your short, but fully descriptive sentences. The premise is extremely hard to bring across unless you've personally lived it (and then, of course, it's harder still). You did a fabulous job of making this your reality.

Ok, I'm going to seem like the bad guy here, trust me, I'm not half the writer you are, but it just seems a little bit... "My daddy beats me so love me" sorta thing. What's her age? What's her name? I want to know more about her. Or is she a he? I don't know, but it was very well written.

PUM...trust me i've had much harsher critique than asking for a name and such...it all will come to play once i can find the words that leads to the next portion of this piece :)