Discussion of "I'll Do My Best!" by kikisukidayochihara

When you change perspective, do something to set the text apart from the rest of the story. We went from the main character to the guy's perspective near the end. You can do this by formatting the text differently (italics) or by using a divider signal like ****. Otherwise, the shift is rather jarring.

Try reading your story out loud once you have it written. Some of the sentences were worded strangely. I could understand them, but sometimes it took a second read through for analysis.

Good work with developing the characters and theme.

Thank you for your comment. Can you explain more to me how to do the formatting of text when I shift to another character? Thanks again for your help.
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I haven't worked on entering a story in the site for a little while, but there should be a way to change the font type to italics or, while you are typing up the story and you have an aside, you can do something like this...

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Start writing about the next person's perspective. Generally, when you switch to a new point of view, you'll want to start a new chapter. The reader needs something more than a new paragraph to happen, a visual cue, to let them know the writer is going somewhere new with the story.

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And then we visually go back to the original person's point of view. Most authors will try to stay with one point of view throughout the entire story. But, sometimes we really need people to see the story from someone else's perspective. It's solely up to the writer to figure out what they want to do and how they're going to do it.

The thing to keep in mind, though, is how the reader will see it - and are they going to understand it. Writing in third person is going to make it easier for the writer to look into the lives of multiple character (vs. first person - which uses the possessive pronouns - I, me, etc...)

Hope that helps some.

Thanks again, I'll keep that in mind. (^_^)~

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>sounds interesting.!

lmao ..... she freaked the guy
really cool story!!!
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