hi, i just posted my first story. it's not long, but it has a lot of chapteras. i split the two stories [first draft and second] into story A and B
it's a story about a father who feels like his daughter has grown up too fast. as it's my first story to post, i'd love some feedback.

story B [read ch2B, not ch2A] is the finished story. story A has a weaker ending..

http://storymash.com/u/kay_wilde/luvopavu/

than ks so much, i'm not sure how the site works, so if that link doesnt work, the story's called Rebellion.