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justhoff	Date Joined: May 7, 2008 Last Login: Dec. 25, 2012

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1		justhoff 1 year ago Context That's depressing. Good job bringing the reader into the emotion of the scene.
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1		justhoff 1 year ago Context Tommy will haunt my nightmares. Nice work.
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1		justhoff 1 year ago Context So that's how ants feel. Nice scene,
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1		justhoff 1 year ago Context The descriptions really pulled me into the scene quickly. Nice writing.
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1		justhoff 1 year ago Context Someone write the next chapter so we can find out what the plans were for!
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1		justhoff 1 year ago Context Inspirational! Need to get writing.
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1		justhoff 1 year, 1 month ago Context I like the part about wanting to sit with the chickens. Makes you wonder...
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1		justhoff 1 year, 1 month ago Context Sad story.
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1		justhoff 1 year, 1 month ago Context Nice descriptions.
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1		justhoff 1 year, 1 month ago Context Great opening hook. Intrigued at the start.
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17 Chapters by justhoff

"My cat" by justhoff

2.9/5.0 - published May 04, 2012 - 1 comment (preview)

My cat wakes me every morning at five am, meowing his head off, pacing the floor next to my slippers. Why? Because he wants to tell me who's boss.
Tags: annoying, cat, collar, meow, morning, shock, sleep, zap

"Realization" by justhoff

2.8/5.0 - published Apr 08, 2012 - no comments - start of story (preview)

His tears slowed to a stream, then a trickle. There was nothing he could do to save her now – that time had passed.
Tags: agency, berries, boy, crying, free, girl, house, man

"Before the funeral" by justhoff

3.8/5.0 - published Mar 30, 2012 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)

Nick awoke sometime later.
Tags: grieving, process

"How the Girl Crossed the Road" by justhoff

3.6/5.0 - published Jun 13, 2010 - 4 comments (preview)

She stepped into the street for the first time. It was a long way down the curb, like stepping off a cliff into a blackness. The cars looked like enlarged metal statues rolling along; creatures left behind by even larger, scarier metal beasts.
Tags: adventure, girl, road

"Little Sleuth - part 2" by justhoff

3.4/5.0 - published Jun 07, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)

The little sleuth follows his mother into Pittsburgh.
Tags: detective, historic, pittsburgh, train, travel

"Little Sleuth" by justhoff

4.3/5.0 - published May 31, 2009 - 3 comments (preview)

As a child I read a lot of detective stories and detective comics...
Tags: detective, pittsburgh, sleuth

"Remembering the Note" by justhoff

3.7/5.0 - published May 22, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)

There were a lot of things I could have done after reading the note. But I followed the instructions perfectly.
Tags: car-chase, ice-cream, note

"On the Fence" by justhoff

3.7/5.0 - published May 16, 2009 - 2 comments (preview)

He stood before the house with his arms slung over the white fence, beginning to tingle from pinched nerves and blood vessels. In the upstairs window, a woman in a blue-silk night gown sat before a row of bright lights putting on make-up.
Tags: blonde, daemon, ex-wife, fence, past

"The Catch" by justhoff

3.7/5.0 - published May 10, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)

Brad rushed to the edge of the warning track, looked up to the jumbotron, took a step, and lept.
Tags: baseball

"Backyard Coyotes" by justhoff

3.5/5.0 - published Sep 14, 2008 - 2 comments (preview)

They moved into our backyard the summer before eight grade – nature had nowhere else to put them. Dad wanted to shoot them with the shotgun, but Momma said he fire a weapon in town.
Tags: animal, backyard, coyotes, nature, small-town

"Tower Power" by justhoff

3.7/5.0 - published Aug 08, 2008 - 2 comments (preview)

Michael was a Green Spacer; he was there at the grand opening of Ronauldi Tower. He was watching the other side of the street very curiously as they moved slowly, monotonously. Peeking in and out from behind other heads was one he recognized...

"Two Years Later" by justhoff

4.2/5.0 - published Jun 04, 2008 - no comments - start of story (preview)

Two years later, Everything was found walking about of the Betty Ford Clinic with the spoon-player rolling behind. When asked why he was inside he said, "It was the Rolling Stones thing to do."