Discussion of "Self Inflicted Pain" by jermccloud

I love your concept and hope to be able to add another chapter to this story later.

My only recommendation is you need to work on mechanics a little more. Start a new paragraph each time you switch characters when in dialogue. It gets very confusing if that doesn't happen. You also had a few spelling and grammar mistakes. Keep in mind the rules of writing - proof read and revise; repeat (even if you don't think it is needed).

I'm personally not big on rules for grammar and such; I prefer to see creativity in action. Again, you have a very cool concept going on.

Thanks jettanyx! I don't really know much about writting, just had some ideas and thought I'd try and get them out. But I'll certainly try and remember your suggestions! Glad you like the story! Thanks again!

Hey great story and 1 things remember Mark Twain never followed any grammar rules he followed his own way and wrote what he felt and it made him a great writer. Check out the highway it too was a good story.