I personally like the idea of edits for one reason. I think faster than I type and typos happen alot! I dont like the idea of another author editing my work though, thats the point of the site is so they can make thier version of the same story.

A forum is def needed, possibly with a private message feature.

why has this fallen from a 4.6 to under 4? haters?

i added to this but upon re-reading i will rearaing the words of "this" i added into "****", your writing...wow.

The connection and power from chapter one are not as bold in this one to me. The story however remains on pace. I really like the bits of humor tossed into a grimey scene, and the line
Orifices were not for multitasking
brilliant!

I really love this...the part about being meant for great things, story of my life, Im good at lots of things, most don't pay money...wanna play trivia?
I haven't read any of the other chapters, as I wanted to do so one at a time. The story has me captivated so far!

thanks, ive had writers block for awhile, so i watched the news yesterday...and this is what happens, i have never created anything beautiful before. Ugly usually pops up. Shall i keep it rollin?

prose, if you understand, if you don't...wake up!

I enjoyed this chapter as well, and had my comment all planned out, and then I read rolandsc's. that is exactly what i wanted to say, and perhaps I over format, but i read my stuff outloud and when reading from a page, its easier when there are spaces between.. but since that is my only complaint: it means nothing!

I couldn't agree more, when this was first written all of my stories had at least 4.5 or higher ratings and i felt that i needed to continue it. Other than ranting in my notebook and writing songs, these stories are my first attempt at fiction and I can feel myself struggling, especially after reading some brilliant stories on here. I have found my writing style, now i just need to find my story. And by all means others be as brutally honest as you will, I can handle it without retaliation. It's the one word comments that get me...whiner, bored etc....

Thanks alot...and yeah, I'm exactly like that in person too. I will be checking some of your work out probably tommorow when I have time to read rather than skim.