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Date Joined: Sept. 13, 2009
Last Login: April 10, 2014

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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 4 months ago Context

I have the same problem! It seems like I can't write a carefree poem or story without putting a melancholy twist on it. (I.E, in Windmill, this poem I have up here, the little girl finds this awesome world and lives happily ever after...because she died and went to heaven...) Everybody in my stories has to have some kind of dark past...it's a wierd compulsion XD.


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0 insert_username_here 4 years, 4 months ago Context

Please....PLEASE...read it out loud to yourself(You're getting better though). It might help to get someone to edit it for you, and get all of the grammar mistakes. Your stories would be really good, if you just took care of the DOL.


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0 insert_username_here 4 years, 5 months ago Context

Good job on the description! That's an interesting way to look at a car crash. It's a little short, though. You write poetry pretty well! (can you check out some of my 'randomosiphies' please? Thanku!


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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 5 months ago Context

Good chapter! It goes along nicely, and the characterization is good. and....unlike my story....there are paragraph breaks...XD. I took your ideas into consideration in my 'journal of a ten-year-old', and wrote a new chapter. can you please read it and tell me what you think? Many thanks.


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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 5 months ago Context

Hi! Your story is awesome, just looked at it. It's really interesting, and I hope you put up the next chapter soon! If you have the time, do you think you could check out my stories? Keep writing!


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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 5 months ago Context

Cool! Nice choice of words, you write poetry well! If you get a chance, can you check out my poem? It's my first installment of "randomosiphies of the idle mind".


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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 6 months ago Context

I think it's awesome when someone has the ability to reveal a picture bit by bit, and still make sense. I only read the first paragraph (there is a toolbar stuck in the middle of my page for some reason) but I can see it's going well. Keep writing, and you will keep improving! Good luck!


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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 6 months ago Context

Very good way to start a story-a million and one directions to take it in. The only problems I see are some mixups with tense. You switched between past-tense and present-tense once or twice. And you forgot the "l" in blinding. Otherwise, i'd love to see where the story gets taken!


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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 6 months ago Context

Yay! A project! I'm in.


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1 insert_username_here 4 years, 6 months ago Context

Me too. It started up for me a few days ago, and has been there ever since.


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