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Date Joined: Sept. 13, 2009
Last Login: Dec. 5, 2010 |
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17 Comments by insert_username_here
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insert_username_here 2 years, 1 month ago
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I have the same problem! It seems like I can't write a carefree poem or story without putting a melancholy twist on it. (I.E, in Windmill, this poem I have up here, the little girl finds this awesome world and lives happily ever after...because she died and went to heaven...) Everybody in my stories has to have some kind of dark past...it's a wierd compulsion XD. |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 2 months ago
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Please....PLEASE...read it out loud to yourself(You're getting better though). It might help to get someone to edit it for you, and get all of the grammar mistakes. Your stories would be really good, if you just took care of the DOL. |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 2 months ago
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Good job on the description! That's an interesting way to look at a car crash. It's a little short, though. You write poetry pretty well! (can you check out some of my 'randomosiphies' please? Thanku! |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 2 months ago
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Good chapter! It goes along nicely, and the characterization is good. and....unlike my story....there are paragraph breaks...XD. I took your ideas into consideration in my 'journal of a ten-year-old', and wrote a new chapter. can you please read it and tell me what you think? Many thanks. |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 3 months ago
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Hi! Your story is awesome, just looked at it. It's really interesting, and I hope you put up the next chapter soon! If you have the time, do you think you could check out my stories? Keep writing! |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 3 months ago
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Cool! Nice choice of words, you write poetry well! If you get a chance, can you check out my poem? It's my first installment of "randomosiphies of the idle mind". |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 4 months ago
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I think it's awesome when someone has the ability to reveal a picture bit by bit, and still make sense. I only read the first paragraph (there is a toolbar stuck in the middle of my page for some reason) but I can see it's going well. Keep writing, and you will keep improving! Good luck! |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 4 months ago
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Very good way to start a story-a million and one directions to take it in. The only problems I see are some mixups with tense. You switched between past-tense and present-tense once or twice. And you forgot the "l" in blinding. Otherwise, i'd love to see where the story gets taken! |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 4 months ago
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Yay! A project! I'm in. |
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insert_username_here 2 years, 4 months ago
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Me too. It started up for me a few days ago, and has been there ever since. |
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15 Chapters by insert_username_here
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2.9/5.0 - published Feb 04, 2010 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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-- /5.0 - created on Dec 04, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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2.9/5.0 - published Dec 01, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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2.9/5.0 - published Nov 15, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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2.9/5.0 - published Oct 30, 2009 - no comments (preview)
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2.9/5.0 - published Oct 25, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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2.9/5.0 - published Oct 08, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
Hidden talents are acted upon. Hardships are borne through, victories are celebrated, and naps are lost. (Oh, the horror...)
Tags: ak, chapter1, conrad, fiction, highschool, inspirational, middleschool, mystery, odell, school, small, smalltown, teen, town |
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3.1/5.0 - published Sep 27, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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"Water under the bridge? More like illegal, lethal chemicals dissolving the bridge." by insert_username_here
2.9/5.0 - published Sep 26, 2009 - 1 comment (preview)
Launce is living his life. Living it just as he has since 1997. Thing is, the year is 2210. His goal is to make sense of his life before he explodes. But wait-he already tried that. And it didn't work. Well let's see what we can do about that.
Tags: action, badass, eternal, eternallife, funny, future, jail, life, prison, sci-fi |
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3.5/5.0 - published Sep 23, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Sep 22, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
A deeper insight into the lives of the main characters, and more mystery enveloping things...basically. . . . .Enjoy the story!!!
Tags: ak, chapter1, conrad, fiction, highschool, inspirational, middleschool, mystery, odell, school, small, smalltown, teen, town |
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-- /5.0 - created on Sep 22, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
A deeper insight into the lives of the main characters, and more mystery enveloping things...basically. . . . .Enjoy the story!!!
Tags: ak, chapter1, conrad, fiction, highschool, inspirational, middleschool, mystery, odell, school, small, smalltown, teen, town |
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2.9/5.0 - published Sep 20, 2009 - no comments (preview)
The story of a strange boy, a solemn girl, a small town, and the mystery that ensues. Read to find out what happens when one fateful meeting changes things forever.
Tags: ak, chapter1, conrad, fiction, highschool, inspirational, middleschool, mystery, odell, school, small, smalltown, teen, town |
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2.8/5.0 - published Sep 21, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
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3.0/5.0 - published Sep 17, 2009 - 2 comments (preview)
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