Discussion of "Little Things" by imadj

Hey imadj, welcome back! :-)
Great job on this. building up the story...and revealing tiny tasty bits as you moved forward. You have a wonderful way of making me, as a reader, relate to the characters state of mind. I’m reminded of another of your great chapters… “Trying to make it to 100.” Obviously not the same emotions, but your just as successful at making me feel the character.
Also, nice use of the title in the chapter!

What a wonderful comment you left me. I am humbled. Thanks for reading it, dogdeity!

Wow. First of yours I've read, imadj, and I'll admit my feet are bare. (Nash sockless = 5 vote)

Your gentle style is powerful against the starkly horrid situation. Maggie has dimension and real emotion. The cigarette, the unreturned call, even her handling of Ophelia - these are finely painted details that lavishly inject your story with life.

"Thougts of what a good father he'd make." Powerful.

I like how you steered away from a cliffhanger but provided open ground for more installments while wrapping your chapter neatly enough to be self-contained. I've not seen much of this style on SM and it's a welcome change of pace. It read effortlessly.

In the interest of transparency (and redundancy, in this case), I voted for your story and I gave it a 5.