Discussion of "Death Warmed in the Sunshine" by honeygloom

yea, at this point Im ordering shots cause its getting deep.
your gifted. cant express how much i enjoy reading your words.

Beautiful.

I'm a girl, the secretary actually. I take the minutes (that's secretary talk for notes) in all our weekly meetings.
I'll let you in on a little secret though, I'm not here for the money. I'm here because I love writing and have found a very supportive community that offers great feedback.
Oh- and for our next meeting, we are launching a massive campaign to force Story Mash to allow voting on comments. We've found yours to have numerous spelling, syntax, and grammatical errors and we really feel their quality threatens the stability of our organization; thus, we would like comments (yours specifically) to be allowed negative ratings. We will succeed, because, as you've so shrewdly deducted, we have a lot of power here.

Voting on comments is a great idea! It's perfect, really. I think people should have the right to disagree about a story, BUT it's a shame when someone's comment page turns into a verbal smackdown (I stooped to replying to someone who complained about a comment I made, so I'm guilty here). It would kind of put a lid on that if, instead of saying, "so-and-so's comment was bad" you could just click a button and rate a comment. It would be a way to tell the author, "hey, I didn't think it was so bad" without having to get into a debate. I just hate it when comment pages turn into discussions that have nothing to do with the story, don't you?

So I found out yesterday that you can already vote on comments, that's what the little arrows next to the numbers are for. Now I feel a little silly, but oh well..

Lovely counter to cornychick, honeygloom, absolutely perfect!!

Another dark one. But I LOVE the last line. "When I die I want my body driven around in a shiny black car so that everyone can see their reflections in it and see themselves in death."

It's not just the meaning, it's the meter. That line has a perfect meter- it's a little poem in and of itself. Good imagery too.

Interesting how one little line like that can grab at you- it's a soundbite, and I can almost hear it spoken by a narrator.

Wow thanks! I guess I write a lot of dark stuff. I always have... I'm not really sure why.

I really liked this. It sounded like someone I would know , not excluding myself. Don't we all think like that every once in awhile. great work keep it up.

I'm gald you can relate, thanks so much for the comments!