Discussion of "A Piece of Possible Spleen" by honeygloom

Wow. This is twisted. And great! I pictured her body parts lol. I know I am a perv, but you did it. The writing. Very creative and friggin awesome. A likeable intelligent character in a wretched situation. CSI meets X-files. So many awesome writers on this site.

I'm very glad you enjoyed it:) Feel free to mash, I didn't really have any plans for it. I'd love to see where you take it.

yes. a chapter from the story of your real life. I wonder.

Exactly, happened to me a few weeks ago. Still trying to reassemble her actually. Does anyone know what a pinkish piece shapped like Elvis might be?

Welcome Back! This is very thought provoking, I can se the person just sitting there, absolutely weirded out. Great writing! Bring on a chapter 2!

Hey thanks! I don't really have a chapter 2 yet. This was kind of stream of conscious. I wrote it in my journal while I was watching WWII in HD on the History channel. If you have an idea, I'd love to see your take:)

LOL...another "stream of conscious" affaciendo (sp)...I really need to get me some of that!

Great story start, honey. I've always loved how your mind works, especially those parts that I have no clue of how they operate..;o).

Very interesting premise..as Baz says..."CSI meets X-files". I like the character a lot, too.

Hmmm, I'm getting a twinge....lol

Sigh... I have no idea how my mind works either. Glad you like it though:)

*sigh of relief* Honey is back! O thank the heavens!

Loooooved it. I loved the character you devolped, as always, you create such wonderful possibilities and worlds. Anatomy is gooey, indeed. I'm stupidlly happy you used that word, 'gooey'. It's an underused adjective. TeeHee, I'm gettin' goosebumps, HONEYGLOOM IS BACK WHOOPIE!

Now is the part were I shamefully beg for your comments: if ya find the time, I'd love to know what you think of my Fate series....

Thanks, dkk, it's good to be back:)

I've got tons of reading to catch up on it looks like. But I will definitely read your Fate series. I'm glad you've been busy;)

You're back! BRILLIANT!

Speaking of brilliant, this chapter was amazing. Less is definitely more-- not telling us exactly what is going on is leaving it wide open for the next chapter, but the fixation on the pieces...that was wonderful. I've got delightful little chills running down my back now. Well done. :)

Ooo.. little chills are my favorite. Thanks!

I loved it. The comparison to frozen peas and carrots, the description of what might be part of her spleen, etc... fantastic. Way to return with a bang, Honey!!!

Thanks! Personally, I can't wait to see if the Mage Hunter has done anything since I've been gone!

Honeygloom, I'm so pleased you've returned. And with this piece of fascinating prose, to boot.

I like how your narrator is more comfortable with rocks, but he is willing to take on the challenge of systematically reassembling scattered, frozen body parts. Delightfully twisted!

Thanks! I love puzzles meself, never found one like this though:)

Great, if not creepy, comeback, Honey. :D

Thanks:)

Magnificent chapter. I’m always attracted to your sentence structure and word usage. But my love affair is forever with that uniquely creative mind of yours. Good stimulations. And for some reason, it makes it all the more sensational to me that you had/have no idea what this is all about. You just thunk it and wrote it.
Ahhh, your brain is so hot.

Glad my febrile imaginings produced a bit of pleasure;)

Wow honeygloom! Fantastic chapter. Morbid and twisted....just my kinda read! I'm glad you are back and hope you continue this one. You've always been a fave of mine and I was so disappointed to come back myself and you were gone. =( How are you sweetheart?

Hey, I'm glad to see you back too! How am I? I'm glad that I have chaos to remind me that I'm still alive;)

I gotta admit, the title is what pulled me in. Blame my anatomy teacher that manages to turn everything into a sex joke EXCEPT the reproductive system. :) Great story. I wish I could write like that! It flows beautifully, and it's morbid and twisted like a good story should be.

Ha! Thanks:) much like the protagonist, I prefer rocks to gooey stuff. I'm glad you liked it:)

Well, if you ever get the chance, you should check out my story starter "Virus." There's no spleen, but it is about random happenings of unnatural body functions.

I really liked it honey....
it is really wonderful....
the charm of your story is.....it allows enough space for the reader....to reflect upon...according to his taste.
Really great.

Thanks! I suppose my story is just like your elipses giving space for the reader to wonder what's going on during the pauses;)

Wow...this was great! Creepy...in a good way, of course. :) I'm dying for the next chapter!

Well written, but not much story.