honeygloom |
Date Joined: Dec. 9, 2007
Last Login: March 4, 2012 |
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Limbered up and ready for a Twinkie.
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2138 Comments by honeygloom
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honeygloom 1 year, 2 months ago
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Ok, no metaphors, just plain 'ol writers lingo... This is the penultimate chapter in a heist story. I did my job and ushered the protagonists to their denoument. From here, Wolfram can decide whether they fail or succed. This chapter is one of two with a ticking clock attached. Too much exposition, too many distractions, too many added plot elements destroy the pacing. So, like I said, concise. Meh. |
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honeygloom 1 year, 2 months ago
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Smooth like brie, Cheese. I, too, loved the reference to Sisyphus. And there's nothing wrong with short, other than we get shorted on your wit:) |
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honeygloom 1 year, 2 months ago
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Arg! I forgot about the variables. *slaps forehead* I read straight through without commenting and the wrote immediately and totally forgot. Ah, well... |
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honeygloom 1 year, 2 months ago
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Not short, Nashville, concise. And it's just my style; always leave them wanting more;) |
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honeygloom 1 year, 2 months ago
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I did it! I finished my chapter! Sorry it took so long, I hope you like it:) *bowing ever so graciously* |
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honeygloom 1 year, 3 months ago
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Wow! I'm glad I don't have to wrap this baby up. way to up the ante, Foo:) |
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honeygloom 1 year, 3 months ago
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My, my, my, quite the cast of characters. I'd expect nothing less:) excellent work, Nash! |
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honeygloom 1 year, 3 months ago
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I'll do it if I can write in my jammies... |
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honeygloom 3 years, 2 months ago
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OK, so I disagree with Nash. I can totally see reading the AP version of this story on my phone while I drink my tea in the AM. And real life people rarely ever have the depth of the literary ones. The action specific style gave me just enough insight into your characters to know that Dennis isn't a wife-beating **** who likes Tucker Carlson and cries during olympic ice dancing. He's just your average, run of the mill, **** with no self-control. And that's OK in a plot driven story. I've met all of these people somewhere, and I can fill in the blanks. Pausing before Ray plunges a knife into Dennis' chest to tell me she prefers moths to butterflies, just slows the action down. And her real-life equivalent probably doesn't notice either lepidoptera when they flit sans glitter into her sphere. |
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honeygloom 3 years, 2 months ago
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My favorite stories are the ones with hateful characters that you still somehow have too root for. Very well done:) |
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125 Chapters by honeygloom
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3.8/5.0 - published Mar 05, 2012 - 8 comments - start of story (preview)
In this chapter all the players move a smidge closer to the moolah.
Tags: heist |
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4.3/5.0 - published Jan 09, 2010 - 10 comments - start of story (preview)
Jeffrey is in the evil clutches of God, will he prove he's man enough to save the soul of his Sweet Jenny?
Tags: and-pansies, clues, mutants |
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4.8/5.0 - published Dec 18, 2009 - 11 comments - start of story (preview)
Continuing from the first chapter. Protagonist takes the pieces home.
Tags: brutally-graphic, creepy, gross, horror, strange |
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4.5/5.0 - published Dec 06, 2009 - 29 comments (preview)
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4.6/5.0 - published Aug 14, 2009 - 9 comments (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Aug 09, 2009 - 9 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Jul 27, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Jul 24, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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3.4/5.0 - published Jul 23, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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2.9/5.0 - published Jul 22, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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3.4/5.0 - published Jul 20, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.4/5.0 - published Jul 20, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Jul 19, 2009 - 3 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Jul 16, 2009 - 3 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.5/5.0 - published Jul 15, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.7/5.0 - published Jul 13, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Jul 12, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
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3.1/5.0 - published Jul 12, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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3.9/5.0 - published Jul 10, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
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3.9/5.0 - published Jul 09, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.1/5.0 - published Jul 09, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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2.8/5.0 - published Jul 07, 2009 - 5 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.4/5.0 - published Jul 07, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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3.9/5.0 - published Jul 07, 2009 - 3 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.7/5.0 - published Jul 04, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.7/5.0 - published Jul 03, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
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3.5/5.0 - published Jul 02, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
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4.3/5.0 - published Jul 01, 2009 - 7 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.1/5.0 - published Jun 30, 2009 - 3 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.0/5.0 - published Jun 29, 2009 - 3 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.9/5.0 - published Jun 28, 2009 - 6 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Jun 28, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.0/5.0 - published Jun 27, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.1/5.0 - published Jun 25, 2009 - 6 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.2/5.0 - published Jun 24, 2009 - 6 comments (preview)
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4.5/5.0 - published Jun 19, 2009 - 6 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.0/5.0 - published Jun 19, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Jun 16, 2009 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.2/5.0 - published Jun 09, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.9/5.0 - published Jun 03, 2009 - 5 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.1/5.0 - published Jun 02, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.3/5.0 - published Jun 01, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.1/5.0 - published May 29, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.5/5.0 - published May 28, 2009 - 5 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.5/5.0 - published May 27, 2009 - 5 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.2/5.0 - published May 11, 2009 - 10 comments - start of story (preview)
A hitch in Tigasis' travels...
Tags: artemis, greek-mythology, hera, herkales, sword-and-sandal, tigasis, virgins |
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3.7/5.0 - published May 06, 2009 - 6 comments - start of story (preview)
Naughty stuff... don't read if you're, uh, prudish;)
Tags: romance |
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3.8/5.0 - published May 05, 2009 - 7 comments - start of story (preview)
A quick sci-fi story
Tags: sci-fi |
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4.7/5.0 - published Apr 06, 2009 - 15 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.9/5.0 - published Feb 20, 2009 - no comments (preview)
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4.3/5.0 - published Feb 12, 2009 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.5/5.0 - published Feb 09, 2009 - 13 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.6/5.0 - published Feb 08, 2009 - 6 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.8/5.0 - published Jan 27, 2009 - 28 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.6/5.0 - published Dec 18, 2008 - 4 comments (preview)
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3.7/5.0 - published Nov 14, 2008 - 6 comments (preview)
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3.8/5.0 - published Sep 29, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published Sep 10, 2008 - 19 comments
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4.1/5.0 - published Sep 07, 2008 - 9 comments
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4.4/5.0 - published Aug 11, 2008 - 14 comments
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4.5/5.0 - published Aug 07, 2008 - 9 comments
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4.5/5.0 - published Jul 12, 2008 - 14 comments
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3.6/5.0 - published Jul 10, 2008 - 9 comments - start of story
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3.7/5.0 - published Jul 02, 2008 - 16 comments - start of story
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4.6/5.0 - published Jun 21, 2008 - 15 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published Jun 14, 2008 - 17 comments - start of story
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4.4/5.0 - published Jun 11, 2008 - 7 comments - start of story
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4.4/5.0 - published May 19, 2008 - 6 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published May 16, 2008 - 10 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published May 14, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published May 10, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published May 04, 2008 - 11 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published May 01, 2008 - 11 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published Apr 27, 2008 - 14 comments - start of story
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3.7/5.0 - published Apr 24, 2008 - 10 comments - start of story
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4.1/5.0 - published Apr 23, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Apr 18, 2008 - 18 comments - start of story
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0.5/5.0 - published Apr 16, 2008 - 14 comments
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3.5/5.0 - published Apr 13, 2008 - 7 comments - start of story
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4.4/5.0 - published Apr 11, 2008 - 26 comments - start of story
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4.5/5.0 - published Apr 09, 2008 - 9 comments
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4.1/5.0 - published Apr 07, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Apr 06, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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4.0/5.0 - published Apr 05, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Apr 04, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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4.4/5.0 - published Apr 03, 2008 - 10 comments
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3.7/5.0 - published Apr 01, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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3.6/5.0 - published Mar 29, 2008 - 15 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 28, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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4.0/5.0 - published Mar 24, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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"Muse" by honeygloom
4.1/5.0 - published Mar 21, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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4.0/5.0 - published Mar 20, 2008 - 10 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Mar 19, 2008 - 7 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Mar 17, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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4.5/5.0 - published Mar 16, 2008 - 15 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published Mar 14, 2008 - 3 comments
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4.3/5.0 - published Mar 13, 2008 - 16 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Mar 12, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Mar 12, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 12, 2008 - 5 comments
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4.0/5.0 - published Mar 11, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Mar 09, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Mar 07, 2008 - 1 comment - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Mar 04, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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4.0/5.0 - published Feb 29, 2008 - 8 comments
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3.8/5.0 - published Feb 26, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Feb 26, 2008 - no comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Feb 22, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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3.7/5.0 - published Feb 22, 2008 - no comments
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4.1/5.0 - published Feb 21, 2008 - 6 comments
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3.7/5.0 - published Feb 20, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Feb 20, 2008 - 5 comments
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4.3/5.0 - published Feb 20, 2008 - 13 comments - start of story
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3.1/5.0 - published Feb 17, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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3.6/5.0 - published Feb 14, 2008 - no comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Feb 07, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published Feb 06, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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4.0/5.0 - published Jan 12, 2008 - 1 comment - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Dec 14, 2007 - 1 comment - start of story
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4.1/5.0 - published Dec 10, 2007 - 11 comments
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