Discussion of "Out of the darkness, beginning of a journey" by hatifabdali

is kinda interesting how the dude hurt his arm, kinda funny, anyways you need to put some more idea, i mean details, about the room and items and other useful things around the room, so people can get an idea and feel like they are in his place to and can see what he see and feel what he feels

Soo far i have to say, is a good story, but i have to agree with hunter u need to develop it a bit more cause it is missing some minor aspects of a great story