Discussion of "The Feeling of Living With Strangers" by hatifabdali

This is really a place for writing fiction, but I'll critique it anyway. I think the narrator is definitely at a frustrated point in his/ her life. He/ she is venting about the constrictions living with relatives has imposed on him/ her. I'd like to say the narrator is being unnecessarily harsh on the relatives, but I do know that sometimes you just gotta get out the feelings you hold inside.

i agree with PEPPZ, but is definitely a sad story, i had a friend going through this to, is tough though

I got to say, what this article is, is what i call sad, but it isn't a story to put in this website, usually what is written here is fictional stories not personal.

To be fair, I have seen posted 'stories' over the last year that are more out-of-sync with the site's original purpose than this. One could easily make the argument that this is a well-crafted soliloquy that allows the reader to get inside the head of the main character before the action starts. Whether or not that is the actual intent of the author, it still allows the rest of us to take this character into our own adventure. I challenge the two new mashers here who have commented to give us your very first mash on this story. Yes, that's a challenge.

I liked this. it was strong, relatable. The emotions kept me engaged. it seems like a great beginning to a story. Seems personal and honest, which works to the benefit of the piece.

do you think you can actually make more of this, i mean i myself can, but i heard here people can add chapters for other can you actually write a chapter for this piece