Outstanding.

I like the storyline, I think. But the language is inconsistent. The same person uses casual and formal speech in the same sentence. Casual would be better. Maybe even lazy, given the description of the Micelene. Keep the story going, though. It could be good.

I like this. I can picture your feelings in the words you chose. Nice work!

I look for good, descriptive writing that doesn't bore me by bogging down in too many details. Set the scene & paint the picture. Then tell me what happens. Your's does just that. Well done.

Hot.

You're creating some good introductory details, and it's easy to picture the scene and the setting. My main critique is with the language you use to set those details in place. At times, it reads more like a technical manual, especially in the 3rd section. There's a lot of "by the book" detail given in the explanations of how her job works, the contest, etc. I think the reader would enjoy a more relaxed style there. Have fun with some of the descriptions, like with how the traffic coordinator keeps the car ads and grocery ads separated. Things like that.
You've set up a good base for the story. Just kick back and enjoy the journey of the storytelling and loosen up the narrative. Have fun!

Thanks for your comment! I put the "rroulette" password in there as more of tongue-in-cheek reference, but you've given me food for thought. I appreciate that!

I like the storyline so far, but the diaglogue feels uneven and a little obvious, if that's the right word. But it could set up for a good ride.