Discussion of "avarice" by dogdeity11

I did all the mashing on this one myself. Not really in the spirit of SM, I know. But I watched Memento the other night, (for like the 100th time), and started obsessing over backward storylines. Figured I would give it a shot.
So, chapter one is actually chapter seven. Chapter two is six. Three is five….yadda yadda. Not sure if it works or not. Would love some feedback.

Woohoo! It's late, I got the house to myself, a bowl of popcorn and cheese - just the way I like it - OH YEAH - and a story by one of my faves that has already hooked me! (Damn it to hell, I NEED a life.) Dog, you really know how to put a precise mental image in your reader's mind! I am sorely jealous of your abilities! I don't know how I have overlooked this piece, my friend, but I am sure glad to have found it! (Okay, now off to the next......)

Oh Holy Master of Tension, I praise thee:) I'd say more, but chapter 2 awaits.

Climbing out of my self imposed hole of ignorant bliss, I found this story a month late! Well....

It's found. It's excellent. I'm off to the next and will comment only at the end...;o)