Discussion of "The Unknown 3: Invasion Preparation" by dogdeity11

Been a while since I’ve contributed anything. I thought this story was a lot of fun and had so much potential. I decided to take it in a sort of ‘Invasion of the Body Snatchers’ direction. Or not…it’s still pretty open. I know some may be thrown because I changed POV, but I thought it was a good time to introduce a new character and look at the story from a different perspective. Might not work for everyone. I totally understand.
Can’t wait to read some of the other entries.
I had a fun time putting it together. Hope some if you enjoy it.
DD11

Nothing like a regurgitation moment to remind me not to read your stuff over lunch. Thanks. You owe me a sandwich.

Speaking of POVs, you have the ability to create one by decapitating the head off a story, then looking inside the body and reconfiguring the guts. Unparallelled.

That much said, parts of this read like a Fangoria selection. Fine on its own, but hard to mesh with the first two chapters. Seems premature that [if] Wilkes has already been possessed, leaving Large as the only survivor three chapters in with two to go. Then again, I've not viewed IotBS. I read it with more the Shawn of the Dead small town overtaken with zombies vibe. (SotDSTOwZ, for those keeping score.)

Hope this is a resurgence and not merely a cameo. Great style, great content, wrong department.

My vote: 3.0

I loved this and reading it made me realize how much I liked your stuff and missed reading new work these past couple months! Damn, it's good to have you back and I echo nash's comments.... hope this isn't just a cameo. Love your style, but this one is in a world of it's own and it would be very hard to work into the middle of this particular storyline...regardless of POV..LOL. My vote: 4.0

Thanks Nash and WWB! I appreciate you guys taking the time to write and comment. I didnt read the rules for this contest so I guess I totally missed the mark. DOH!
Great submission from both of you! GL-

I have to echo my predecessors on this one. The piece on its own is a fine work of fiction, but it doesn't mesh too well. I have to give it a 3.0, but would have rated it much higher if it meshed better...your style is like none other I have read on here and look forward to reading more and hope you are able to contribute more!

thanks politeditor! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

Well, well, well...'Bout time you made it back...;) I think I actually had a conversation with Nash contemplating some possible reasons for your disapearance...came out with a few funny scenarios. lol You're style and imagination are untouched, in my opinion, by the vast majority of contributors on this site. I do agree that it's a bit disjointed from the current storyline. But I loved it! With you, I am never disappointed. So glad you're back- ;) Foo

thanks Foo. Always great to hear from you. I'm sure your scenarios were tons more entertainng than the truth. :-)

So glad you wrote another entry, because in this one you lost me at innate sixth sense and gifted. That's all this contest needs is another trip to mind-powers land.
I didn't read it closely enough to rank it, so I won't, but it looked well-written if not mashable.

Thanks wolfram...yea, this chapter seems to be quite a pile. cant recall exactly why I added the 'sixth sense' to be truthful. it really doesnt come into play much. this turned out to be more of a charachter sketch for me with Largent than it did a decent chapter for this storyline. Appreciate you taking the time to read!

The voice of the story is completely altered by taking it out of first person. Great ideas and the execution of the writing is good - but it doesn't fit with the rest of the story... :(