Discussion of "October Chill: Door to Door Evangelist (2.2)" by dogdeity11

"Holy" ****!!!! So much tension/conflict and so many questions...Is there a 2.3?

Ditto on the crowd comment by Honey G. Really flows well and felt like I knew them all. great page turner, Dog.

"...and the emptiness of an unfulfilled life playing hopscotch on his senses."

"give him my warmest regards." burning booze - devil's hell - - - sweet!

I like being thought of as Honey G, except that she's like, you know, a girl and all....lol. Another solid line drive to center field, dog!!

Ohhhh, mannnn! Sorry WW! I take full responsibility :-) but it's really Dog's fault - he didn't construct a chapter, he created an event!

Between that and a crying baby, the two-year-old needing to go potty, and a thirsty five-year-old, I was overwhelmed.

LOL...no sweat, a-tall, wsells...I thought it was funny. Geesh, however do you write anything with all that commotion going on? LOL Just remember, someday you'll be able say, "been there, done that", like me!! Just remember, my friend, don't blink on the way!

I'm really glad you decided not to edit and publish the whole thing- which makes my vote a 10

"He fell heavily to the ground with the sting of whiskey in his heart, and the emptiness of an unfulfilled life playing hopscotch on his senses."

Gut wrenching dogdeity11. Very detailed story man. Awesome writing, greatly done...

excellent... another 5 Jesse