Discussion of "Alyssa i" by dogdeity11

Well done. Nice opener. ;-)

Very sweet:) And beautifully done, contrasting innocence with dark things she may not fully understand.

Delight, adoration, heartbreak, hope- and most of all- love. Such great bounty in just a few lines.

Very poetic .

wow that paragraph was beautiful, how you described the eyes without giving them full attention and the way you worded it was perfect.