Discussion of "Dirty Laundry - Chapter 3" by djinndarme

Wow, DJ...I mean..WOW! You kept the tension high, all of the characters - in character; and finally, after leading me to believe you weren't going to deliver...you gave us the words on the towel...;o) Exquisite!

I think it obvious that Joey would have to be brought back into the story, though not the way you did it. Well done.

Thanks, WWB. I tried to move the story forward without boxing in the next author.

You know I had to give the words on the towel. It was too perfect an opportunity to pass up!

Great job, DJ. Interesting new character. Now we have a suspect. I'll put my Private Investigator hat on and try to figure out who the nice old lady might be.

Glad you liked it, Al. I hope I left you with some good ideas for your mash. Can't wait to read it.

The suspicion between husband and wife - especially from the husband - really adds to the story and to their relationship.

I also liked her re-interrogating(?) her eldest son and the challenges with that. You did well in expressing those challenges while keeping the character's tone and voice. (Her need for information at odds with the patience needed to handle her son.)

The message on the towel is the icing on the cake. It really, really opens things up and creates endless possibilities for continuations. Well done, DJ! Great chapter. I can't wait to see what happens next. :D

Glad you liked it, JD. I was hoping the interaction between mom and son rang true. :-)

I LOVE that you hid the towel's message until the end - kept the tension high through it all! And I had to smile at the line about the cartoon rabbit singing an aria... I think I saw that episode... :)

Great continuation. You accelerated the tension between husband and wife and dropped excellent clues about what's happened and why. Great work!

Thanks, Aggeloi! I've seen that episode many, many times and I thought it might be Joey's favorite.

Wow - GREAT job! It kept the rhythm and the suspense was intense! I enjoyed the interaction between the characters, and can't wait to see where this goes.