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darabre

Date Joined: March 12, 2008
Last Login: Dec. 23, 2012

21 Comments by darabre

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1 darabre 5 years ago Context

I really liked this story!!!! Lara is a very believable character and I really want to know the rest of her story. I liked that the store owner was german instead of the usual convience store owner cliche. Also can't wait to see how it develops.....awaiting the next chapter.....


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0 darabre 5 years ago Context

"Say it.....out loud"
"Vampire"

this story was kind of interesting untill it turned into a twilight knockoff. you should go back to the point where they are waiting for the bus and write....something else. Hey I love twilight as much as the next girl but stephenie meyers already wrote that one. You have interesting characters, but just one thing identical twins can't be male/female. they would be fraternal twins.


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3 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

I liked it, but i was also disturbed by her inviting kids to her house by themselves. Even if her motives are pure, but maybe that's why she's gonna die. hmm interesting.


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1 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

Hebe, it actually is a prologue to a story I am in the middle of writing. I promise there is a lot more. Thanks for reading!!


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1 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

I liked it. It was well written, your writing has an urgency that just sort of propells you to the next line. Cool.


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2 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

This was really great!! A little disturbing in some parts (turning the shirt inside out made me gag). I always enjoy really good writing because I see it like a movie in my head instead of words on a page, this made a very vivid movie. I give it a 5


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1 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

There are no bells in college, at least not at any of the colleges I have attended. Other than a few spelling and grammatical errors, not bad. so is something up with her partner Alba? I thought maybe her prof. was looking strangly because he knew something.


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2 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

I liked this a lot. It was very descriptive and I can just see that mom staring into that hamper. Can't wait to read more.


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2 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

I was wondering if english was not your first language? The way this is written reminds me of a russian guy I used to know, his english sounded pretty much the same.


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1 darabre 6 years, 1 month ago Context

Loved it!! it is so funny, I would love to read more.


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7 Chapters by darabre