Discussion of "A girl who was really shy" by dallasandme

uhh...is the format intentional?

i was just a bit confused when the POV was switched in the middle because there wasn't a break in the paragraph. i also don't understand some of th things that was happening in th story but maybe if the formatting s changed it'd be easier to understand.

the format definitely makes it hard to read.

This was good Amina. But like the others said, you should hit enter everytime a different person speaks. If you would like you could send me your story and I could edit it for you! ANYwho! I guess I'll see you tomorrow!! *nudge* And guess who you will see tomorrow!! *wink*
Love Ya Bestie!
<3
Elizabeth

There are far too many spelling mistake and errors to make this anywhere near enjoyable to read. There's nothing here to make this a story. Punctuation is missing all over the place. Sentence structure is mind boggling. I don't thing adding paragraph interupts will help the "format" as there is no clear structure to anything... it's a flow of conscious thought, but it's so tedious to read that I regret having wasted my time on trying to see if there was anything salvageable.

"plz" is NOT a word. Abrieviating words as if you're sending a text message to a buddy does not send a good message to the reader.