Discussion of "October Chill (2) Curious Forces" by curly_stare
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pbrim 5 months, 3 weeks ago
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I think that this story has great potential. There is more to the preacher than meets the eye. I am anxious to read the next chapter. |
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euterpe 5 months, 2 weeks ago
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What is up with that preacher? Good story line. |
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dawn_land 4 months, 3 weeks ago
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"My mind wandered a bit with the restless wind in the pines an aroma of honey suckle filtered through the scent of damp leaves, a curious force about me questioning the arrival of our new guest." Great line! I really enjoyed reading this chapter and am looking forward to the next. Your use of descriptive passages is almost distracting from the storyline, but really does work well. You can tell that the character is not really focused on his neighbors, the preacher, or the weather, but on an amalgam of all. It's very interesting the way you weave in and out of the conversation using the October theme throughout. I like that every smell and every piece of scenery is connected to autumn and that you haven't strayed from that. Excellent writing! |
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