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Discussion of "[Shuffle]" by cjbishop


1 alharris 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

I'm doing my best to follow...is this 4 different conversations...an abused wife, a detective, a serial killer...and someone else who gets flipped off??? The writing is effective and challenging. But I need another chapter. Maybe I have to cut and paste.


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1 cjbishop 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

I was trying something new compared to how I usually write. With each shuffle, it goes back and forth through characters' perspectives. It was three characters so far. The last one shuffled back to the detective. Yeah, I thought it was confusing; but if I begin another chapter, I think I could clear it up. Kind of tried to put a little mystery and suspense


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1 cjbishop 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

And thank you for saying it was effective and challenging. I was brainstorming earlier and remembered how Stephen King did something like this in the Drawing of the Three, though it was on a timebasis and not different character perspectives.


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1 alharris 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

It did occur to me that the shuffling could be time-based as well. Don't change it, just give us more. These SM chapters work best for readers when they are not too long or too short...but with this format it may take a knucklehead like me 3 or 4 chapters to catch on to the well-written flow.

New writers come and go. They often don't stick around if they're expecting tons of feedback...and a book deal. You have writing talent, a willingness to read and comment, and I trust longevity on the site.


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2 cjbishop 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

Thank you for all your input, al. Greatly appreciated. And for your compliments, gives me confidence to continue.
I've learned through my short years that if you don't expect much, you won't be disappointed and more often you will be pleasantly surprised. I appreciate your's and anyone's time they take to read what I write. As for the book deal, I am not striving for that as of yet. A couple of years from now, I may. But as of right now, I'd like to surround myself with talented writers who share my passion. I love to read just as much I do writing, so I'll be here for quite a long time. As long as there are writers, there will always be a new story to be told.
There I go rambling again :) But, my friend turned me onto this site and I found that I was wanting to come across and be apart of a site like this. I consider myself lucky to be here. Thanks again


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1 cjbishop 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

2nd deal is finished: Hit or Stay?

(Heh, picturing it like Blackjack. Second chapter up)


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1 FrankDCrime 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

I love it. I see the whole "shuffle" playing out in my head. Great writing style. Kind of reminds me of a James Patterson novel.


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1 cjbishop 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

Thank you, Frank. Have to check out some of his work sometime. Along with the Watchmen graphic novel you referred. Barnes & Nobles and Lowe's are my toy stores these days, lol.


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1 LadyAdelia 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

I really like this style. It confused me at first and then I got into it and devoured it!


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1 cjbishop 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

Thank you, LadyAdelia :)


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1 BazookoJones 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

This was pretty awesome. Nice switch of the narrative, very creative, look forward to reading more.


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1 cjbishop 4 years, 8 months ago Reply

Thank you, glad you liked it


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1 writerwannabe 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

Damn! How the heck did I miss this? Well, I've found it, now and it's katy bar the door! lol.

This is really fantastic writing, CJ. As mentioned by al and LadyAdelia, I struggled with the first several paragraphs but then, got into it. I don't see the comparison to Patterson. I've read several of his books (enough to realize that he has a "cookie cutter" style that doesn't appeal to me). Likely I missed the one that Frank mentioned this was similar to.

I'm all for story and this is a great one, well written and uniquely told. I'm off to the next...;o)


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