Discussion of "Red Brockton: All the World's a Stage" by chloe

Hi guys- I put this up as a draft as i wasn't sure if anyone had claimed my spot and was working on the same chapter. I felt I had to address the funny comment in chpt 3(?) about it being "the day I lost my sanity"- so i may have gone a little over the top with it. cheers!
Chloe

Haha, this is great. What a crazy and hilarious situation! You keep the style and feel of the narrator quite well. Great addition.

Fantastic! What kind of a play has fog and strobe lights?! I love it, chloe, really nice job!

Wow... talk about ramping it up! Excellent!

What a hoot! It definately tied the last couple chapters together. There were a couple spots that needed a bit of editing - nit-picky stuff like a "your" instead of "you're", but not enough to destract from the story. I really enjoyed it. 4

Fantastic. I just wish I knew who the familiar voice was! Great bit of writing. This story is really coming along great.

This is great. Suspensful and intriguing! Very enjoyable.

Thanks Guys! Nash kicked off such a fun premise- who's up next?
Chloe

Um, I am/was. I just realized that I never commented on your chapter. Loved it. Red and Steve road show, fog machines, donuts and porn decor. Oh my. I hope I managed to do your ending, justice. It was Joe, wasn't it?

I tried writing several limericks to describe the joy I experienced with this chapter, but "Pizzazz" is sooo difficult to rhyme. Cops, stripper poles, a retiree with too much money, idiots with delusions of grandeur (delusions of mediocrity?)... Love it.

Thanks Nashville, hahahah- pizzazz (spaz? jazz? I'm stumped too!) So glad you liked it - I was worried you would find it too over the top- but I had to do something with that "day i lost my sanity" comment. Can't wait to read on! Might steal that "delusions of medoicrity" for future use! (lol)
Chloe

wow. very thick, good vocab, alomst broughsy.5.

Many Thanks for your feedback and vote Huntsfamouswolf! (at the risk of appearing an idiot-what's broughsy? -lol)