Beautifully written! - strange how the human psyche is always somewhat drawn to the familiar from our earliest years- good or bad- I think it works as a compelling opening chapter but could stand as it is as a completed piece.

Of course! what was i thinking! hahah

Hahaha- but whatever would they do without their $1400 waste baskets?

How about a unique version of a fairy tale either modern day or alternative ending/ viewpoint? or has that been done too much?

Did you ever read those childhood books- one called "Ben and me" was a bio of ben Franklin through the eyes of a mouse that lived in his house- i think there was a Paul revere bio by his horse? clever with lots of kid appeal

oooh can I have one, please please! I need a little inspiration.

Oooh this opens a wealth of possibilities!- beautifully written with great visuals- painted a vivid picture!

A standing ovation! What a riot- loved the descriptions of Red as "technicolor savior" the nudie cushions, the defunct fog machine! The theater verite' improv for the script (I think I took that same film class!) was classic- I loved the way you had Steve thinking on his feet and gradually winning over the actors and leaving a hanger at the end! Sorry this is late I haven't logged in in a while (2009 is not off to a very good start unfortunately) but can't wait to see where this leads!

Many Thanks guys- You're right about Jake on the bus being a little iffy- love the idea about him being pulled from the stairwell instead- that would have worked better! Glad you got the "ghost" town idea (lol)not many people mentioned picking up on that. Chapter one and two were such fun I thought I'd have a go!
Chloe
p.s. Wolfram- thanks for rounding up! :)

Many Thanks for your feedback and vote Huntsfamouswolf! (at the risk of appearing an idiot-what's broughsy? -lol)