Discussion of "gardening" by cartoonfruit
Netnet 1 year, 8 months ago
Will I guess you can but fence around your garden. and this story would be better written on Triond.
I guess you like rabbits.
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cartoonfruit 1 year, 8 months ago
thanks for the advice
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MrLightening 1 year, 8 months ago
Nothing wrong with the writing as such - it flows evenly and is reasonably easy to read. However this piece lacks urgency. The problem itself appears to be trivial, at least in a universal sense, and fails to evoke much thought or emotion in the reader. Two stars.
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