Discussion of "In Sepia Vision" by blackwolfjk13

It was really good.
The deatail was very nice to. You did a very good job on it.
But only one complaint or more of a question.
What were the sentences before each paragraph?
But other then that this was a very good story.
Hope you continue it!
Also if you'd like I should have the premis for the horror story up today, sorry it took me so long. But I'd love to have writing like yours working on it with me.

What sentences before each paragraph? Is your computer showing something mine isn't for some reason? Hmm, will have to check that on a different machine (not like I can change it now, anyway, already published!)

And yeah, still looking forward to the colab! Can't wait to see it. :)

Yeah I don't know my computer might be showing something. I dont know.
Also just check the forum in a couple of hours. It will be up then.

What browser are you using? I tried firefox and safari on my computer, and my brother pulled it up on his IE and it still looked just fine. You're triggering my OCD! lol

LoL sorry. Hey the uh premise isn't up yet...I had some things I had to unexpectedly do (last second things). But hopefully it should be up by tomorrow afternoon. Its been a busy week.
Also did you take a look at my other story?
Feel free to colab on it, I'd love it if you would.
But yeah so theres that!
P.S. Don't worry about the lines.

I peaked at it briefly but I need a good chunk of time to sit down and read it now that I realize how long it is, lol. I'll try to really delve into this weekend but I have a petsitting gig plus an interview for my journalism thing up in Seattle, so I'm not sure what my timetables will be like. The Prologue certainly caught my attention, though! (Oh, and military brat plus spent some time in ROTC, so I can probably assist with that end of it, as well.)

As for the lines...yeah...I figure I have to just let it go since I can't see what you're talking about! Lol. I totally probably would've sat there poking at it until I figured out what the deal was, and then reposted the whole chapter to make it look right. Silly OCD. Haha!

its very good and nice

by the way can u check my stories guys becauze iam new

do you really think that because if that what you think i won't write again thanks for your advice you will never see my stories or writing again.
and for your information i don;t beg any one to see my stories i just wanted help because all i am seeing that you don't comment on any one but your friends.
bye

look sorry if i bother u but i really wanna to talk to u my email is mad_lover_one06@yahoo.com