Discussion of "Fickle Fall Winds" by bjv

Feels familiar . Nicely done . At the same time , it feels more like the end of the story and not the beginning .

Thank you. Maybe I should expand it and make it the end of a story.

Here, again, your descriptives were excellent. In this case, however, I think you went too far outside the house compared to what was happening inside - your main character.

Had this been about half again as long, I think it would have evened out. To leave the chapter at this point is short of the mark.