i hate this format..but if i didn't do it the sentences would run together like tight, wrinkled stitches. sigh. i never really mastered copy-pasting onto the storymash word processor.

i think the story's too tasty to be left alone at that. but you did keep up the tone and got me reading until the part where it all dissolves to the great cliche, "it was all a dream." :?

i am a critical reader most of the time, and i really liked ur mash. u are really a writer.

you are like that preacher. Am i (we) the narrator,the house storymash.com, and you the brilliant and dark preacher'? I don't know if I'm amazed or afraid. =)

i still like it. =)

wow.. i would really love to continue a story like this. i like the metaphor on the first paragraph, which got me reading to the end of the chapter. if i have the spare time i would definitely add a chapter or two. so many ways it could go! and on one of the fave topics of ordinary, struggling human beings.

thanks for ur comment! sure i'll check it out. i need to write another chapter anyway, just to keep things goin'. goodluck on us both!

uhm...scary

Hey there, sira. I’ve read your work – the two chapters of midnite raine, the vampire story, and the draft ‘a nameless lover. I think I’d be able to write a chapter on ‘a nameless lover’-that is, if you publish it. =) I’ve noticed recurring patterns on your stories, which I might add had me devouring each realistic scene. First is the subject of being different, portrayed by ‘sira’ in midnite raine. That and the conflict with people around her because she is different. Second is the longing to find someone who will understand and see her past her ‘different-ness’. Of course when we envision such persons, we want them to be beautiful, I think because it reflects our desire to find the inner self of that person to be beautiful as well, the kind of person we can entrust our hurts and faults and imperfect selves without fear of being used, manipulated, or the like. Forgive me for asking, but are those two patterns really in your life? Your writing expresses these things so realistically I can almost touch their rawness. The other things are 1. vampires. Have you been reading a good book about them? Sometimes I read fiction books about subjects I like that the fantasy gets in my blood (like being a secret agent-that’s a secret ok?=) 2. Japan. I can’t figure out if this is really a part of your life, or just a vicarious experience. I’d bet on the former. 3. cars 4. linkin park 5. male companionship/friendship.
I know this looks like an essay, but I thought maybe we could help out each other, being a sort of newbie myself (I’ve just joined Storymash last March), and learn through our writing. Actually I’m curious about what kind of person you are-reading someone’s writing can do that. Again forgive me, but I have a psychologist-side that I seldom express. Goodluck on us both!

hey guys if you have read 'a writer's promise' please leave a comment, no matter how short it is. thanks!!