Discussion of "Chapter 3: Prelude" by arataxia

I really liked this chapter. Well written and well... cool. But it doesn't mesh well with the first chapter. Feels like two completely different people. And the whole tone is more action adventure than horror. So I'm giving ya' a four.

Thank you for the critique. I admit that I had a very hard time writing like the first chapter. It's written in a pretty unique style.

I thought overall you did a fine job of melding the styles of the first two chapters, and the prose is quite good. I found the main character's delight in his work and reveling in the look of horror on Robby's face to distractingly incongruous with the tormented anti-hero of the first chapter. I also think it is too soon to start the Final Battle. All the same, I like the writing and wish I did not feel compelled to the conclusion that this isn't the right chapter. Maybe give it another go if you're up to it, I would love to read it! Keep up the good work!