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Discussion of "The Virus" by amanwriter


-2 maoripete 6 years ago Reply

A computer speaking to a human and wagging his little metaphorical fingers at us in judgement and rebuke.
THAT'S SO ORIGINOL!
Someday a truelly inventive writer will come up with the idea of the ultimate computer being asked the ultimate question 'Is there a God' and responding with "There is now"
I'm being sarcastic. Just in case you don't figure it out.
I've been recently advised that there are places of learning that don't require the push of a button to learn something.
Best you bone up on some readng material buddy.


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1 Firebird197896 6 years ago Reply

Interesting start. I would like to see it continue. Reminds me a bit of Wargames.


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1 honeygloom 6 years ago Reply

I liked the concept, but it was a little preachy. Try stretching it out a bit. Maybe it takes a few days for the protagonist to realize what's happening. Maybe some people do die as machines start to malfunction. Give us a little tension, make your protagonist work for his resolution. Overall, good concept though, I think it has potential:)


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