Discussion of "The Virus" by amanwriter
maoripete 8 years, 2 months ago
A computer speaking to a human and wagging his little metaphorical fingers at us in judgement and rebuke.
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Firebird197896 8 years, 2 months ago
Interesting start. I would like to see it continue. Reminds me a bit of Wargames.
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honeygloom 8 years, 2 months ago
I liked the concept, but it was a little preachy. Try stretching it out a bit. Maybe it takes a few days for the protagonist to realize what's happening. Maybe some people do die as machines start to malfunction. Give us a little tension, make your protagonist work for his resolution. Overall, good concept though, I think it has potential:)
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