Please leave a comment once you reach an ending, so that I might be able to figure out whether most people are following the same path.
Also include your skill point distribution in your comments...

Sometimes you will be guided by links at the end of the chapters, so do not make decisions based on depth...

No, its really unfair. Money will be able to buy way to victory this way (just as we see in politics).
Nice try solving the problem but I doubt if this is the answer.

I suggest you get more and more judges and try to read all entries just as they are published. This way judges won't have to go through all stories in a few days.

Thanks for the comments. Actually I too am fed up of writing good plots in poor language, so I ALWAYS prefer not writing as an author. I always take up the 'stupid-est' character and then write for it. It always works. No matter how badly I write I blame my shortcomings on the character. So there is NO use of fancy words or correct grammar. A 15 year old always writes like the style written in the story. So I request you to revise your ratings and give a little more rating to the 15 year old (dead) character in the story for providing a touch of realism with his poor writing style.

A greatly created suspense, and not to forget- A very nice storyline. You skillfully provided all details of the family yet the reader ouldn't get bored.

A perfect story to mash!

Great story, you write brilliantly. I recommend you start a story on your own. As far as I can deduce (which is not much far) you are better in making stories than writing one (much like me). So start off a new story and keep practicing!!

Wow thanks tnbrewer, I wish that I knew how I managed that. I know little or nothing about these things. That character in the story IS actually me, I am 15 too.

Thanks.

I am taking part for the first time, so where do I send my entry?
Thanks for the contest.

A very nice starting to a story fit for mashing. You seem to have an interest in murderers and serial killers. Nice.
I recommend using a hitman instead, it will make things more interesting and less phychological.

Thanks so much. Actually I myself used to write shorter stories a year back when I was 14, I got so carried away with this one that it turned out to be huge.

More mashing projects coming up from here!