would a drug dealer really say "enroached" or "turd" as a threat? The story started off serious and ended up being a comedy, or at least it seems. Interesting, cant wait to read the rest...

Im a fan of anyone who's a fan of Aqua Team Hunger Force! Nice!

Nash,

I appreciate your comments and your opinion, somewhat supercilious, but still honest and benignant.

I wouldn’t say I am looking for critics/comments, but looking for readers. This is because a myriad of people can read the same story and each will interpret it differently; some right on subject with the author and others much farther away. I want each person to like the story yet to construe it in their own way.

The conspicuous relation is self-image. I wanted to continue the “Big Butt” story in the way I did because I knew maybe this author and some of its readers thought a certain way about weight. I chose to continue it as a rebuttal. If I had just posted the story as an original, the people I was trying to reach may have not have had a chance to read it and everything I write pertains to a different audience. That’s the second best thing about Story Mash, a story can be taken in as many infinite directions as the imagination allows.

As for what happens next, well that’s up to you: Either your imagination, or your chapter, if you choose to continue it.

For any other readers:

The funny thing about self advertisement is it works. I wrote a comment on the story with the highest ranking in the contest and what do you know….. People actually read a few of my chapters! Writers: SELF PROMOTE! SELF PROMOTE! SELF PROMOTE! Some may think they are too good for that, but you’re never too good to gain a new fan, and it also seems pretty elitist to assume that readers will just come to you.

Lastly, an explanation of your vote is not needed, but appreciated and respected. I am just happy you got here to my story, through a cable modem and few paragraphs we made a CONNECTION……and you got a fragment of who I am.

Emanate and prepossessing!

very delineative

take it from me

take it from me

It seems as if everyone is writing a chapter to the same story, October Chill. While it is nicely written, I am not interested in the topic and the story doesn’t generate any desire for me to continue it as I am sure a lot of others feel the same way. But I want to win and I want people to read my work so I almost feel forced to publish a chapter of the story everyone else is writing on just so I can get readers. I know it is out of your control as to what people choose. But do the judges of this contest really want to read the same stories/story line/story theme over and over? And some of the ""front runners" are the same people who've published multiple "front
running chapters" to the same story! To me it just seems a little boring and disappointing at the same time. I think one of Story Mash's themes is versatility yet there isn't much in this contest.

take it from me

Ive been sitting here for 5 minutes trying to think of the words to say to compliment you on this vivid story but all I can think of are the words of a stoner...."Whicked!"