Again, less "telling." Instead of , "She was in the middle of a wooded area. Trees loomed around her and tall grass tickled her arms.", leave out the first sentence.

"It was a full moon that night, so everything was somewhat illuminated, and since it was the beginning of Autumn, there weren’t too many leaves on the trees blocking the moonlight from shining down to her." Leave out "it was a full moon that night, so" and just start with "Everything was somewhat illuminated"; you mention the moonlight later in the sentence.

Good story, I'm enjoying the plot immensely!

I liked the last line the best... gave it 5 stars for the excellent writing and great description!

I liked this! I love stories about young girl friendships. I always want to write one, but it's hard when so many have been done. This "doll sex" is definitely something I haven't read before. :o)

Will do, I'm stuck! I've been sitting on this for months now.