My goodness, so many different opinions....in the end the, after all of this, the topic will probably be something like a research paper on the cellular structure of grubs (this is not at all interesting, at least in my opinion, but it was the only topic I could really think of that hadn't been mentioned yet...)

Historical fiction would be quite fun to write, but I don't know how having 5 people write different chapters would work. I guess it would work, just a lot of work :P

I like myster, or mysterious fictishery, or any other kind of dark thriller type story. Anything's fine with me (just not any Jane Austen stuff)

How about diary entries? Just a brainstorm, I don't even know if I like the idea yet or not

what exactly is an opt in? you have to be selected to participate? Or you have to say you will participate ahead of time? huh?

Ok, ok, so i didn't tie up some of the loose ends :)
And I think I knew it before I posted it, I just got lazy.

To answer some of the questions, she threw up because when she heard the explosion, she realized a child had just died.

He only had one child strapped to the bomb because.....um....Good point.

Anyways, thanks for the comments.

oh man! thank you for the extension. Only gives me two extra days (that i'll be around) but that should be enough. Hopefully I"m allowed to give a revised version.

So I can repost this? It's not due till the 10th? OH MY GOD!!

lol you're right! I left many things a little unanswered. Unfortunatley, I only had one chapter and I felt like I was running out of time (I have to get ready for a trip that I"m leaving for tomorrow, and I ran out of time.)

The janitor's office was where Pete had rigged the bomb that went off when he let go of the button. I should have explained it better I guess.

I basically wrote half of it one day, and the other half (plus the proof reading) in the other, and the cramming made me get a bit careless. Unfortunately, I didn't have enough time to let it sit and come back and proof read it later. START EARLIER i tell myself, but it's no use. I somehow always put it off.

Thank you for the comment, and at least not voting with a 1 or 2 stars!

Was that a lot of fun writing that? A job well done? Will you look back at this moment in your life and ponder upon your ingenious remarks, noting how exquisitely you ordered your words and got your point across?

Wait,,,what was your point?.....

Oh well. Let me tell you this: I can make any connection I want to that story, and describe it in the vaguest of ways, and you will have not a clue what that connection was. This is because I have hidden things in the text that others will not see. What takes great skill is writing so that people CAN see the connection. You've got it all wrong, unfortunately.

:)

I think I wanted to story to go a different direction, and when it didn't I tried to bring it back, and apparently it was too much.
Oh well.

Thanks! I'm new to this kind of stuff, and I realize my explanations were probably lacking. And some of the character reactions were probably inaccurate, too. Next time, I will try to work on the things you've mentioned, and I know they are all my week spots :)

Thanks again

Great job! I'm not as picky as nashville (:)) which is probably not a good thing. Just want to say it's interesting how every story i've read, and mine, has killed off danya lol.

Also, good job on giving us an idea of what her feelings are really like. I had a bit of trouble with this (maybe cause i'm not a woman).

My one helpful pointer is that, with Robert being the boss of the building, he seems fine to abandon it very quickly when Maribel says ""Robert, we need to get to the town! Now!"

Lastly, as nashville said, it seems a little easy to get into the building. But hey, maybe that could be a catch in the next chapter!

Other then that, nice job.