*Thanks :-0 oops. :-)

Thank for pointing out my mistake. I do understand the difference. Are there any other corrections that you have for my story? Do you have anything to say about the content?

When i opened my eyes the a large bulge protruding from under the skirt of a certain blond came into focus, and upon further inspection I realized that I had seen that bulge before.

To be honest I was a little afraid to come back and read the comments for this sotry... I think one of the hardest parts of writing is listening to the critics and taking it with an open mind. So I thank you all for giving me your honest opinions.

Thank you for your comments Nash.. Don't worry I know that this story could use a lot of work. I struggled from the beginning on it, so I ended up just hashing it out. It was a really good learning experience for me.
This by the way was my second attempt. I think your dead on when you said to rewrite it three more times..

Thanks again.

I am a college student working towards two degrees. The first is a B.A. of Psychology, and the second is a B.A. of English with an emphasis in writing. I am also pursuing a certificate in technical communications. My ultimate goal is to become a writer. I have a lot of great ideas for books that I want to write, at least I think they are great. In the mean time I am writing short stories here and there. I think I'll end up poasting mostly during the summer months, because in addition to going to school full time, I have to work full time.

http://storymash.com/u/Walkindownaline/mubaduta/

I have added the third and last part to my story Burnt Skin... I think a whole two people have read it thus far, so I hope that you all will go and read the entire story and give me some thoughtful and constructive feed back. Maybe you could even give me a honest vote as well. I thank you all in advance.

Nash, your quickly becoming one of my favorite Mashers. Thank you for your poem.

I'll take a word, if you have any left