Discussion of "Giant Rock: Revelation" by WBScott

I really liked this ending! You pulled things together well, and I loved both the consequences of human immortality as well as the tidy disposal of the inducer - and then the twist of it reappearing in time at the end. My only comment is that Rachel's change of heart and decision to destroy the integratron seemed a little abrupt; she seemed very determined to stay on side of the Venii, then abruptly decided to go ahead and join Frank. But aside from that, it flowed well, and I really enjoyed how you wrapped everything up.

Thanks as I said, it was a hard piece to write. I really went out of my comfort zone on this one.

That was a fascinating conclusion! There were some issues with flow and writing technicalities, but if the grammar nazi didn't tackle you, I won't either. I agree - it was a hard story to write. I hadn't realized it was based on an actual person, but the research and trying to tie in actual facts in with the fiction brought a fun element to it. I hope you enjoyed that as well. I loved the twist at the end! The whole time travel idea was mind bending, but you seemed to pull it off well - tied up loose ends. And I loved the crash in Roswell... Good job!

Great, great job, WBS! I couldn't see anything here that indicated you were out of your comfort zone...;o).

Unless I missed one, I think you tied up all the subplots and loose ends. I was especially impressed with how you worked in the Roswell UFO crash. Fabulous! A close second to that was your inference to the "circle" of time by bringing the inducer back into the end.

Great writing, my friend - a perfect ending!

Thanks for those kind words. I usually try to avoid time travel and vulgarity; this piece had plenty of both.
Also I think I spend more research per word into this piece than any other. Then to tie the truth with our fictionalization of Frank Critzer, it was daunting! However, I like to think my writing skills grew from it...:)