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VivicaLiqueur

Date Joined: July 16, 2008
Last Login: Jan. 5, 2009

7 Comments by VivicaLiqueur

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2 VivicaLiqueur 6 years, 5 months ago Context

I love werewolves :)
Fun read, I'm wondering how this will end.


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1 VivicaLiqueur 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Thank you :)
Much appreciated!


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2 VivicaLiqueur 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Brilliant! :)
I love your seamless use of the hypercube in conversation. It fit. It didn't seem punched in there to make you look good, so to speak lol
Incredibly creative and enjoyable!
Loved it.

I'm a bit confused on one thing.
First the shadows explain her soul can not feel pain, or pain in the classic sense, then at the end they tell her she will feel intense pain and be left with scars.

So, can she feel pain or...?


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1 VivicaLiqueur 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Hmm..."boobiewalker" is it?
I don't get the ties your chapter had to anything at all written in chapter one.
I also do not commend your arrogance.
Your "story", if one can call it that, had no relevance to the story line.
Princess Papulei was just married and in love, she would not have been aroused by her husbands death.
The lucid scene had no relevance to anything.
I'm all for a good sex scene (which is not what I would call what you describe as what could be your "masterpiece") if it fits.
What you wrote I would not even consider erotica, it had no passion, it was just violent, there's a difference.
Again, if the violence suited the scene/chapter that preceded, then ok.
But again I can not stress enough, your chapter was completely irrelevant.


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1 VivicaLiqueur 6 years, 5 months ago Context

I absolutely love your writing.
Incredible & not trying to blow smoke where it shouldn't be but, the best I've seen so far.


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1 VivicaLiqueur 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Also, I do not think the Father was over-written or over done at all!
He was perfect. I enjoyed the intensity of his character. It is what brought that eerie, ominous feeling back into the story.
The second chapter to me lacked the gritty macabre that was introduced in chapter one. This chapter started to bring that back, thank goodness ;)
Also, the ending was great. I loved how you left it with the Father visiting the prisoner.
Wonderful.
I'm rooting for you! :)


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1 VivicaLiqueur 6 years, 5 months ago Context

Phenomenal! Brilliantly written, tying in the past couple of chapters smoothly and introducing an intriguing character! I really enjoyed this :)


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