Discussion of "Bad Vibes" by VictorMensa

There were some tense shifts and missed words here and there, but nothing too distracting. I loved the shift in perspective and I'm really interested to see where you take this from here. Again, great job!

Great story....

Very cool, but no idea where you could go with this. What kind of plot could there be? Cool idea though.

I think that one could have a lot of fun with it, actually. I think that the second capter creates a new hero to offset the other creature. Tamara could come to Robbie in dreams from another world or something like that.

Good work. The descriptions of the melting horror and the character reactions are quite vivid. I like the challenge it presents for continuation, leaving it open to go about anywhere. I look forward to reading the next chapter that is already there waiting. Someone needs to address the issue of the significance of the old woman knowing the reaper dude's name, and I consider him not to be so much a villain as an anti-hero. He is actually loving, and tormented, authentically driven by a higher mission, rather then a deluded psychopath. How terrible would it be if he is defeated? Perhaps the undoing of reality as we know it?