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Discussion of "Lost Luster" by VictorMensa


2 dkk4510 1 year, 10 months ago Reply

I like the fast paced dialoge. At first it didn't hold me, my kids easily distarcted me from reading, but then I got in to it. Watch the lengths of your paragraphs, and your descriptions of the surroundings.

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1 OXYGENBRAIIN 1 year, 10 months ago Reply

I LIKE IT, VERY PROMISING, I WILL TRY TO DO IT JUSTICE

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1 theblackhand 1 year, 10 months ago Reply

I like the originality. You are very good at that. Well done.

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1 VictorMensa 1 year, 10 months ago Reply

I wonder, should I provide a 2nd chapter or allow others to do so?
Your opinions will be appreciated.

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1 theblackhand 1 year, 10 months ago Reply

Add a second. I welcome it.

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